Nick also wrote this sentence (and used 7 commas!!):
Instead, the Yankees, fighting for a playoff berth, knowing the Orioles, one of teams they're competing with, had won, had took an 8-7 lead after being down, 7-2.
Instead, the Yankees, fighting for a playoff berth, knowing the Orioles, one of teams they're competing with, had won, had took an 8-7 lead after being down, 7-2.
Instead, the Yankees, fighting for a playoff berth, knowing the Orioles, one of teams they're competing with, had won, had took an 8-7 lead after being down, 7-2.
ReplyDeleteOh my lord, that is some sentence. (Had took?? Ouch!)
Dropping commas is like dropping names--you think doing it makes you look sophisticated and knowledgeable, but you can get into embarrassing trouble very fast. He should have took more care!
ReplyDeleteThe paragraph with that sentence in it has a whopping 15 commas.
ReplyDeleteI posted, on Facebook, about that sentence, the one that Nick "wrote", and we all ridiculed it, which is to say, made a lot of fun of him, this in the comments to said post, to which I made reference, many clauses ago.
ReplyDeleteI read stuff like this and immediately think of Ralph Wiggum from The Simpsons:
ReplyDelete"Me fail English? That's unpossible!"
To that, I say:
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Had took? That makes me think this was written by some 19-year-old intern. Not that all 19 year olds would use that grammar, but I can't imagine an established writer would.
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